读续写师生说种新题型种新挑战写类作文笔者认初学者说四步骤写容易掌握请面例题:
阅读面材料根容段落开头语续写两段构成篇完整短文续写词数应150左右
Jenny was the only child in her home She had a quarrel with her mother that afternoon and she ran out of the house angrily She couldn’t help weeping when she thought of the scolding from her mother Having wandered in the street for hours she felt a little hungry and wished for something to eat She stood beside a stand for a while watching the middleaged seller busy doing his business However with no money in hand she sighed and had to leave
The seller behind the stand noticed the young girl and asked Hey girl you want to have the noodles?
Oh yes but I don’t have money on meshe replied
That’s nothing Ill treat you todaysaid the manCome in
The seller brought her a bowl of noodles whose smell was so attractive As she was eating Jenny cried silently
What is it?asked the man kindly
Nothing actually I was just touched by your kindnesssaid JennyEven a stranger on the street will give me a bowl of noodles while my mother drove me out of the house She showed no care for me She is so merciless compared to a stranger
Hearing the words the seller smiledGirl do you really think so? I only gave you a bowl of noodles and you thanked me a lot But it is your mother who has raised you since you were a baby Can you number the times she cooked for you? Have you expressed your gratitude to her?
Jenny sat there speechless and numb with shock she remembered Mothers familiar face and weathered handsWhy did I not think of that? A bowl of noodles from a stranger made me feel grateful but I have never thanked my mum for what she has done for me
On the way home Jenny made up her mind to make an apology to her mother for her rudeness as soon as she arrived home
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Nearing the doorway Jenny took a deep breath
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A gentle touch on her hair called her mind back
第步读懂意 理清脉络
根记叙文六素弄清文章意特弄清事物物间关系时态(通常般时)事件(事起)语言特色(便续写时语言特色前致保持变)等等 文物事件:
知材料情节事发展脉络:
●珍妮母亲吵架离家出走街游荡钟感觉饥饿
●心碗面吃感动流泪
●位陌生告诉母亲养做数次饭菜应感谢母亲
●珍妮意识错决定回家妈妈道歉
●珍妮母亲吵架离家出走街游荡钟感觉饥饿
●心碗面吃感动流泪位陌生告诉母亲养做数次饭菜应感谢母亲
●珍妮意识错决定回家妈妈道歉
外文语言特色:
(1)较物對话
(2)较高级语法结构:
形容词作补语:
Jenny sat there speechless and numb with shock
分词短语作状语:
She stood beside a stand for a while watching
Hearing the words the seller smiled
第二步细读首句构思框架
仔细阅读两段首句结合正量结尾思考致框架题两段首句:
Nearing the doorway Jenny took a deep breath(走门口珍妮深吸口气)
A gentle touch on her hair called her mind back(轻轻碰头发思绪回)
续写第段首句第二段首句确定第段框架
第段首句知珍妮应鼓起勇气敲门回家第二段首句轻轻碰头发应母亲物三续写中般意出新物非情节发展需思维回说明第段中珍妮回家没见母亲回忆母亲吵架事回忆母亲年关爱第二段出现母亲第段应母亲家母亲里呢?根常识女出走应找女
第二段框架第二段首句正量结尾确定
事容定正量弘扬社会义核心价值观迷路终定回家失败遇困难终定成功吵架定言睦相处犯错定会改新重新做贼逃定绳法等等
根正量原文结尾应母女
第二段框架母亲回女道歉母亲原谅母女
第三步增加细节开始写作
已定框架范围情节发展生活常识推断事中物见闻思说做等段增加58具体细节题第段构思细节:
第段
鼓足勇气推门进屋
母亲外出知处
累难沙发坐
争吵场面浮现脑海
粗鲁愧母
母亲责骂皆关爱
感羞愧泪流脸颊
第二段
抬头见母亲
处找里
母亲累松口气
扑入怀里道歉致谢
母亲听喜心头
根致性原容语义衔接连贯外语言风格致应分词语短形容词作状语等
确定框架增加细节开始写作
第四步修改润色整洁誊写
初稿完成认真检查注意语义否衔接前否连贯事件否符合逻辑语言特色否前文致修改润色整齐工整誊写答卷
参考范文
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Nearing the doorway Jenny took a deep breath When she pushed the door open and entered the house she found her mother was not in Tired and sad she sank down onto the sofaWhere could my mother be?she wonderedWas she still angry with me?Again the scene of the quarrel appeared in her mind She remembered her rudeness to her mother Realizing that all the scolding from her mother was due to the fact that her mother really cared a lot about her she felt rather ashamed and tears began to roll down her cheeks
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A gentle touch on her hair called her mind back She raised her head and saw the familiar face of her motherHere you comeI’ve been looking for youshe said tired and relieved Jenny couldn’t help throwing herself into her mothers arms Mum I’m so sorry and thank you for all you have done for meShe expressed her sincere apology and great gratitude Hearing this her mother smiled patting her back gently
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